Women Rights without a Movement
1. Write your thesis as it is written in your draft.
THESIS: B&B argue that the one-dimensional view is limited and incomplete, thus, they believe that two faces of power are expressed in the process of decision-making or reflected in the action with direct pressure on decision-making, which means that the second face of power exists in non-decision making.
Or more generally, in the countries like Afghanistan and Saudi Arabia, women in current days are getting votes as a result of pressure from the other countries, is to prevent democracy getting onto the agenda.
2. Now write the topic sentence or main idea of the first body paragraph:
How is it possible for the women in Saudi Arabia and Afghanistan to get the right to vote as well as that of representation in the government without having a women’s movement? Women Rights without a Movement
2b. In ONLY 1-2 sentences, explain how this sentence/main idea relates to the thesis:
This sentence is the first statement of the thesis, with two examples. Because of all the trouble in the world right now, it’s important to know how an important change happened in a different way from most countries.
3. Now write the topic sentence or main idea of the second body paragraph:
Although power is exercised when X participates in the decision making that affect Y, still power is also exercised when X devotes his energies in reinforcing social and political values that limit the scope of political process to public consideration of only those issues which are comparatively innocuous to X.
4. Now write the topic sentence or main idea of the third body paragraph:
Even though power in Saudi Arabia is very concentrated, it is diffused in Afghanistan.
4b. In ONLY 1-2 sentences, explain how this sentence/main idea relates to the thesis:
This topic sentence for the third paragraph is linked with the thesis statement as both the thesis statement and the topic sentence go hand in hand. The topic sentence has elaborated on the power of women in Saudi Arabia and Afghanistan, which the thesis statement is focused on.
5. Now write the topic sentence or main idea of the fourth body paragraph:
A clear view of the concept of key political decision that is linked with the changes in the situation of the two countries in context to women empowerment
5b. In ONLY 1-2 sentences, explain how this sentence/main idea relates to the thesis:
This sentence continues with the discussion of what kind of power gave women the vote in Saudi Arabia and Afghanistan. It suggests that the diffuse power and concentrated power can explain what has actually resulted in such a notable change.
6. Now write the topic sentence or main idea of the fifth body paragraph:
The community values and the political institutions that tend to limit the scope of actual decision-making to “safe” issues and the participation in decision making of concrete issues. Women Rights without a Movement
6b. In ONLY 1-2 sentences, explain how this sentence/main idea relates to the thesis:
This sentence introduces the facts that show that it really happened that influential forces from the other countries and direct military force in Afghanistan led women gain vote in these countries without a women’s movement.
7. Write out your conclusion in full:
The history of Afghanistan and Saudi Arabia both show that there was a lot of foreign influence or force that gave women the vote and political representation. In many countries, like the United States and Great Britain, there was a strong women’s movement fighting for women’s rights and those movements has brought in changes in the political and social life in these countries. But in Saudi Arabia, and Afghanistan, there were no trace of women’s movement. In each of these countries, there was no force inside the country that gave women the vote. It is only through the power and influence of countries like USA over both of these countries that women get the right to vote.
7b. Does your conclusion restate your thesis but ALSO sum up the main points of your previous paragraphs? Does it leave the reader with that something extra that conclusions require? If not, try to rewrite it here:
I think my conclusion is giving the readers a clear view of the fact that has led to such a devastating change in the countries like Saudi Arabia and Afghanistan that has a long history of women suffering.